the map below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particularly university
The maps compare the development of the Biology school in a specific university that will take place in the future.
Overall
, the school will be transformed over the period particularly
in more space Add the comma(s)
, particularly
of
learning and Change preposition
for
carpark
for students, faculties and Correct article usage
a carpark
also
guests.
As the map
shows in the present day, there is the forest
next to the road behind the central library and teaching building situate
Wrong verb form
situated
at
southwest of it above the Change preposition
apply
another
Correct quantifier usage
other
forest
. In the future, the forest
in the north of the map
will be cut down and replaced by lab and office buildings
. The central library is still the same while
teaching
building will be expanded to two linkage Correct article usage
the teaching
buildings
and also
the forest
below them will be changed into a car park.
Turning to the right of the maps, there is indoor
sports hall Correct article usage
an indoor
locate
on the northeast side of the Change the form of the verb
located
map
and the drama centre
in the middle between the sports hall and the group of Cafe, Lecture room and IT centre
buildings
. For the
planning development Change preposition
The
map
, it
shows that the indoor sports hall is unchanged, whilst the drama Correct pronoun usage
apply
centre
will be turning
Wrong verb form
turned
to
the music Change preposition
into
centre
. Furthermore
, the lecture room will be duplicated into two buildings
with connected areas and finally
IT
Correct article usage
the IT
centre
will be enlarged to be bigger than recently.Submitted by krist_ar03 on
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