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the map below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particularly university

the map below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particularly university
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The maps compare the development of the Biology school in a specific university that will take place in the future.
Overall
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, the school will be transformed over the period
particularly
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, particularly
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 in more space
of
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for
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 learning and
carpark
Correct article usage
a carpark
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 for students, faculties and
also
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 guests. As the
map
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 shows in the present day, there is the
forest
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 next to the road behind the central library and teaching building
situate
Wrong verb form
situated
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at
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apply
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southwest of it above the
another
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other
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forest
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. In the future, the
forest
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 in the north of the
map
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 will be cut down and replaced by lab and office
buildings
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. The central library is still the same
while
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teaching
Correct article usage
the teaching
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 building will be expanded to two linkage
buildings
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 and
also
Linking Words
 the
forest
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 below them will be changed into a car park. Turning to the right of the maps, there is
indoor
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an indoor
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 sports hall
locate
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located
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 on the northeast side of the
map
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 and the drama
centre
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 in the middle between the sports hall and the group of Cafe, Lecture room and IT
centre
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buildings
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.
For the
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The
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 planning development
map
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,
it
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apply
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shows that the indoor sports hall is unchanged, whilst the drama
centre
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 will be
turning
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turned
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to
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into
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 the music
centre
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.
Furthermore
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, the lecture room will be duplicated into two
buildings
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 with connected areas and
finally
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IT
Correct article usage
the IT
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centre
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 will be enlarged to be bigger than recently.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, forest, buildings, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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