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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some that it is better to accept unwelcoming
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 which might be caused by lack of money or concern related to work.
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 others believe the opposite, they agree it is better to overcome these issues and try to improve
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 views. Some people are calm, which
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 means they are not extremely affected by issues that are caused, and they tend to accept whatever happens without taking action. These decisions are made when
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 believe there isn’t a way  to overcome an issue and some might think they deserve to be
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. As an example, if an employee is dissatisfied with their job
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 of finding new job opportunities or asking a manager for help they will simply continue their work no matter the misery.
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, there are people who react in the opposite way and they get triggered by these unwelcoming
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. Some will try their best to change the
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 they are facing so it fits their preferences. It is not easy for
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 who value comfort or peace to be calm about these problems.
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 as changing jobs if it is disturbing or even working harder for a better income. Personally, I think both sides have clear reasons and no one should be judged by what they prefer, but I think everyone should make sure that they are at peace by avoiding or trying to get out of
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 if there is even a slight chance because if ignored these
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Introduction
Ensure that the introduction clearly addresses the question asked, presenting a clear topic and a preview of the main points to be discussed.
Conclusion
Include a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points discussed in the essay and clearly states your opinion on the matter.
Supported Main Points
Develop each main point with sufficient detail and relevant examples. Every paragraph should have a clear central idea that is expanded upon.
Logical Structure
Work on creating a logical structure that guides the reader through the essay from the introduction to the conclusion smoothly.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
Stay on topic and ensure that each paragraph relates to the overall subject matter, avoiding any unrelated information.
Relevant Specific Examples
Provide concrete and relevant examples to support each point you make, this will strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.
Complete Response
Pay attention to the task instructions. The essay should respond to the specific statement and questions asked, in this case regarding environmental problems, not general job-related issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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