The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount times spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The two line graphs
illustrates
the differences Change the verb form
illustrate
of
percentage of the electrical Change preposition
in
appliances
owners and Change the noun form
appliance
Use synonyms
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
hours
that people spent Use synonyms
to do
their Change the verb form
doing
houseworks
from 1920 to 2019. At a glance, Correct your spelling
housework
house works
while
the use of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners encountered an upward trend, Linking Words
a
Correct article usage
the
number
of individuals who own washing machines experienced Use synonyms
the
Correct article usage
a
fluctuated
trend, Replace the word
fluctuating
whereas
Linking Words
an
amount of Correct article usage
the
hours
people spent per week gradually decreased throughout the given period.
Looking at Use synonyms
percentage
of the use of electrical machines, more closely, Add an article
the percentage
while
the Linking Words
number
of washing Use synonyms
machine
rose significantly from 0% to 100% and remained stable at 100 Fix the agreement mistake
machines
percent
since 1980, that of vacuum Change the spelling
per cent
cleaner
increased about three times and eventually Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
reach
100% in 2000. Wrong verb form
reached
Whereas
the Linking Words
amount
of users who own Change the quantifier
number
refrigerator
fluctuated between 1920 to 1960, its Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
number
minimally rose Use synonyms
about
10% from 1980 to 2019.
Change preposition
by about
However
, the Linking Words
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
hours
people spent Use synonyms
to do
their housework had Change the verb form
doing
been
significantly dipped around 2 times between 1920 and 1960, the Unnecessary verb
apply
number
, Use synonyms
afterward
, minimally declined Change the spelling
afterwards
approximately
5 Change preposition
by approximately
hours
.Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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