The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount times spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount times spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The charts illustrate the fluctuation in one country between 1920 and 2019 by percentages of households with electrical appliances and the number of
hours
for doing housework .
Overall
, the number of households with
vacum
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vacuum
cleaners
and refrigerators increased significantly from the start and stagnant from 2000 to 2019,
while
washing machines
drop
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dropped
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slightly in 1960 before increasing again. The average
times
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time
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spent on housework decreased significantly in
this
country between 1920 and 2019.
To begin
with,
refrigators
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refrigerators
refrigerator
and
vacum
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vacuum
cleaners
have
similarity
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similar
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trend
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trends
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.
Refrigators
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Refrigerators
growth
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grow
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significantly in
ownship
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ownership
that starting from 0% to 100%
by
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in
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60 years only. After reaching the highest point,
rerigators
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irrigators
refrigerators
constantly
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were constantly
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stagnant until 2019. In the same
trend
,
vacum
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vacuum
cleaners
rise
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rose
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significantly from 30% in 1920 to 90 in 1980.
Vacum
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Vacuum
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cleaners
reach
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reached
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the
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a
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peak at 100% in 2000 and constantly until 2019.
However
, washing machines have different
trend
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trends
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that
fluctuative
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fluctuate
. The
ownship
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ownership
township
of washing machines
increase
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increased
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slowly from 40% to 70% in 1960 and
decrased slighly
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decreased slightly
at
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to
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60% in 1980.
Although
,
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apply
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washing
macines
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machines
encourated
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encouraged
downward
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a downward
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trend
in 1980, the
trend
increase
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increased
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slowly to 70% in 2019. The amount of
times
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time
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a household needed to spend by people in
this
country
fall
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fell
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significantly from 50
hours
to 20
hours
in 1960.
Afterward
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, the average of
hours
decrease
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decreases
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slightly around 10
hours
and constant until 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, vacum, cleaners, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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