The graph below shows how people buy music.

The graph below shows how people buy music.
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To give a line graph illustrates the proportion of how much three different music types were purchased. In general, it is noticeable that the portion of
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music purchasing at two types of
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declined except for streams, which underwent a considerable increase over the entire period. A closer look at the graph reveals that
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CD purchased accounted for approximately 60% in the initial. Despite
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figure underwent a gradual decline in the following years and
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nearly 25% in terms of the person of downloads mounted to about 35% in 2011
then
increased slightly to 42% in 2014 but had dropped to roughly 30% by 2018. With regard to the
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of streams, were the least
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in the preliminary.
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graph
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position in 2018 skyrocketed and remained at 42%. With these statistics
of
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streams were the most obtained music method beginning from 2017 till the end of the period
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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