The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate the
varities
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varieties
in ownership of electrical devices and the amount of
time
spent doing
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house chore
house chores
housechore
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housing
in families in one country over
a
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the
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period
1920
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from 1920
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to 2019
Overall
, the percentage of
household
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households
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with machines quite
in creased
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increased
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over the
time
presented.
Moreover
, the hours that families spent on them
was
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slightly decreased day by day. To commence with, the washing machines
was
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were
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utilised devices that started at 40% and continued to grow to 70%, after 20 years
then
had a dip before got back to the previous amount. In the same
period
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the vacuum cleaner
was rising
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rose
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stably from 30% and approached the top for over 80 years. At the same
time
, the refrigerator's trajectory might be
rank
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first in
developpment
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development
thanks to the
rocketered
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rockered
rocketed
jump to 90% users when it
was appeared
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appeared
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at
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in
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1920.
In contrast
, the orbit of the hours of housework per week in the country slightly declined from 50%
then
just only
got
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the
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10% at the final
time
that was recorded.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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