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the diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the buiding industry.

the diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the buiding industry.
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The flow diagram illustrates the procedure through which
bricks
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 are produced for
the
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construction purposes.
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, it is rather simple and is comprised of seven stages which start with digging
to
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producing brick and ending with delivery. The process begins when
clay
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the clay
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 is collected by
digger
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a digger
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, to mix with raw ingredients namely, sand and water, after passing the metal grid, which is done in
roller
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the roller
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. The mixture of materials is converted to
bricks
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 either through
wire
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a wire
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 cutter or moulding, which
make
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makes
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 different shapes of
bricks
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. In the next step,
bricks
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 are dried
into
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in
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oven
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the oven
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 for a 1-2-day period.
bricks
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 are
then
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 laid into two separated kilns,
firstly
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, moderate temperature
with
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 200-900 degrees, and
secondly
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, high temperature (870-1300 degrees), after heating,
bricks
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 are passed through
cooling
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a cooling
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 chamber for two to three days. In the following stage
theses
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these
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 manufactured
bricks
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 are ready
to
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for
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 packaging. Ultimately, packages are delivered by
lory
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lorry
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 to construction areas for building purposes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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