The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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the table below illustrates data about secondary/high school teachers from five different countries in 2009 received how much in each.
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, Korea and Japan had the lowest initial incomes but had the highest
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taken to reach top
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.
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, Luxembourg got the first place for earning the highest.
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Australia and Denmark were two countries that had the most little time to move to leading
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. Obviously, Korea and Japan had the lowest
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at first were 30.500
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and 28.000
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, respectively and each year received 52.600
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and 49.000
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, which actually took 37
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in Korea and 34
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in Japan to reach top
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of about 84.500
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and 62.400
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in that order. and
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Luxembourg was the country taking the highest incomes at 80.000
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at the beginning and 112.000
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per year and
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got the maximum of about 139.000
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. Moving to the two
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countries, which had the at least amount of time to increase
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to the maximum,
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Australia was 9
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, and Denmark was 8
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, salaries, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net income
  • cost of living
  • purchasing power parity (PPP)
  • economic indicators
  • wage disparity
  • median wage
  • livable wage
  • compensation package
  • inflation rate
  • educational funding
  • professional development
  • currency exchange rates
  • teacher retention
  • standard of living
  • qualifications
  • experience level
  • tenure
  • collective bargaining
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