The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
the table below illustrates data about secondary/high school teachers from five different countries in 2009 received how much in each.
Overall
, Korea and Japan had the lowest initial incomes but had the highest
years
taken to reach top
salaries
.
besides
, Luxembourg got the first place for earning the highest.
while
Australia and Denmark were two countries that had the most little time to move to leading
salaries
. Obviously, Korea and Japan had the lowest
salaries
at first were 30.500
dollars
and 28.000
dollars
, respectively and each year received 52.600
dollars
and 49.000
dollars
, which actually took 37
years
in Korea and 34
years
in Japan to reach top
salaries
of about 84.500
dollars
and 62.400
dollars
in that order. and
then
Luxembourg was the country taking the highest incomes at 80.000
dollars
at the beginning and 112.000
dollars
per year and
finally
got the maximum of about 139.000
dollars
. Moving to the two
last
countries, which had the at least amount of time to increase
salaries
to the maximum,
while
Australia was 9
years
, and Denmark was 8
years
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net income
  • cost of living
  • purchasing power parity (PPP)
  • economic indicators
  • wage disparity
  • median wage
  • livable wage
  • compensation package
  • inflation rate
  • educational funding
  • professional development
  • currency exchange rates
  • teacher retention
  • standard of living
  • qualifications
  • experience level
  • tenure
  • collective bargaining
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