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Air travel is responsible for a lot of pollution in our environment. Some people think that prices of airplane tickets should be increased in order to reduce air traffic. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there is a lot of
air
 pollution caused by increased
air
traffic
.
Nevertheless
, a group of
people
 think that tickets on aeroplane flyes should be cost more for declining
air
traffic
 numbers. I absolutely disagree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, if
air
traffic
 costs are increased, fewer
people
 going to be able to travel around the world.
For example
, not very rich families who are used to travelling each summer to different
countries
, will be forced to do it more rarely.
However
, if most
the
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people
 will stop their journey around the world, the economics of some of the
countries
 will dramatically fall.
Moreover
, for those
people
 who need to be mobile and fast in any situation, going to decrease their movement speed.
For instance
, presidents, CEO's and different sportsmen who have a tight
traffic
.
Furthermore
, if
frequency
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 of
air
flyes
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 is significantly reduced, a lot of
people
that
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 used to work in the
air
 team
,
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 will lose their jobs which lead to unemployment and
a
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worse life quality in certain
countries
.
Secondly
, if tickets are more expensive, the number, cost, frequency and speed of parcels going to be much more compared with the default
air
traffic
 amount.
Additionally
,
due to
 the fewer
air
 trips, related to each other
people
 go to see each other much less often than they used to do.
Thus
,
people
's relationship quality will be spoiled.
To sum up
,
airplane
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 ticket price increase is very bad because of the numerous causes, it is going to reduce tourism,
mails
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 and
parcels
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parcel
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 efficiency, face-by-face conversations,
movement
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and movement
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 speed and destroy economics in some
countries
.
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