The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
The table illustrates the salaries of secondary school teachers in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Korea and Japan in the year
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2009.
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The
salary
will sightly
incrase
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increase
increased
according to
the seniority of teachers, but they all have a different starting point
,
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and increase rate
due to
their own operation and policy in different places.
Firstly
, Korea and Japan have a similar amount of starting
salary
, around $30,000, but
also
the lowest
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to other countries. And, the highest starting
salary
is Luxembourg, reach to $80,000.
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they have
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huge differences at the start, the years taken to the peak
salary
are
similarly
the same, from 30 to 37 years.
Secondly
, Australia and Denmark compared to other countries have a middle level of starting
salary
. It only
take
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around 10
year
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increased
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to a peak
of
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salary
,
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, the
greatest
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salary
recieve
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received
are
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lower
then
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than the
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other three,
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the lowest income for
teacher
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teachers
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net income
  • cost of living
  • purchasing power parity (PPP)
  • economic indicators
  • wage disparity
  • median wage
  • livable wage
  • compensation package
  • inflation rate
  • educational funding
  • professional development
  • currency exchange rates
  • teacher retention
  • standard of living
  • qualifications
  • experience level
  • tenure
  • collective bargaining
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