The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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The table illustrates the salaries of secondary school teachers in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Korea and Japan in the year

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the seniority of teachers, but they all have a different starting point

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, Korea and Japan have a similar amount of starting

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huge differences at the start, the years taken to the peak

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the same, from 30 to 37 years.

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, Australia and Denmark compared to other countries have a middle level of starting

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annual salary
gross income
net income
cost of living
purchasing power parity (PPP)
economic indicators
wage disparity
median wage
livable wage
compensation package
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The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

Nowadays children are consuming too many sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for and the solutions to this situation?

Some people say that parent should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own discuss both opinions and give your opinion ?

Writing task 2 task 2 IELTS 17 Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There is an idea, according to which that with more and more people using the internet and messaging, the communication in the real world will cease to exist.