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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 19955 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 19955 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
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The two charts compare data about the
number
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 of
Japanese
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 tourists based on their frequency
to travel
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 overseas and visit a particular country from 1985 to 1995. It can be seen that the total
number
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 of
Japanese
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 individuals who were travelling abroad gradually increased throughout the given period,
as well as
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 their visits to Australia. In 1985, about five
million
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 people
of
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in
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 Japan had already departed for international countries for holidays. In the next five years, the
number
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 experienced dramatic growth until it doubled in 1990 to just over 10
million
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 people.
However
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, there was a slight decrease in the figures in 1991, which increased afterwards to almost 12
million
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 humans and plateaued until 1993. The
number
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 continuously grew by two
million
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 individuals per year until, in 1995 the total
number
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 of
Japanese
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 tourists reached approximately 15
million
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 individuals. Regarding their visit to Australia, there
were
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 only two
percent
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per cent
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 of
Japanese
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 visitors
who
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went there in the beginning. The percentage steeply grew until it reached around five
percent
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per cent
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 in 1989, but plunged to almost four
percent
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per cent
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 in the next year.
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, the
number
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 rose gradually until the end of the period, which accounted for 6% of the total Australian tourists.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, japanese, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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