The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The given line graph illustrates the number of
visitors
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to an
island
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in the
Caribbean
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Sea in millions between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, the total number of tourists visiting the
Caribbean
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island
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always increased during the whole period.
In addition
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,
visitors
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staying on cruise ships were lower most of the time than
visitors
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who stayed on the
island
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.
To begin
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with, in the first 2 years, the total quantity of
visitors
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to the
Caribbean
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island
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was 1.25
million
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, with approximately six-tenths of them deciding to stay on the
island
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,
however
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, the rest
choose
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chose
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to rest in ships. In the following 2 years, cruise ships experienced the biggest drop of the whole period with just a total of half a
million
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,
however
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, staying on the
island
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significantly increased and saw its peak with a total sum of 1.5
million
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. In the
last
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year, the
Caribbean
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island
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experienced a significant increase to 3.5
million
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in total numbers of
visitors
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.
While
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,the number of cruise ship
visitors
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witnessed a sharp increase to 2
million
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and saw its highest numbers,
in addition
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, staying on the
island
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kept its peak with 1.5
million
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of
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apply
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total
visitors
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, caribbean, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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