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You have discovered a lot of rubbish in a lake near where you live. In the past, the lake had always been clean. Write a letter to the local council. In the letter: · describe the type of rubbish that you saw in the lake · explain where you think the waste has come from · suggest what the council should do about the problem

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 email to inform you that the
lake
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 near Samber Park , located in North Mumbai, needs to be cleaned. Yesterday ,when I was passing through the
lake
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, I found plenty of plastic cans,
polythenes
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polythene
 and some chemical waste from the factories and shops around the area.
In addition
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 to it, the area was always clean with no garbage around it, but
due to
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 development in the area with a lot of factories, it is getting polluted. Even people visiting the park are throwing rubbish in the
lake
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. Effective measures should be taken in order to clean the
lake
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. Notice should be sent to facatories for stop dumping the waste ,
also
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 garbage bins should be kept at every corner of the
lake
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 for recycling waste. Shop owners should inform customers to use recyclable bags
instead
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 of polythene bags. Your sincerely, Takdeerjot Kaur

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a little more detail about where the waste comes from.
task response
Task response: Use a letter form, not email, and write 'Yours sincerely' only if you know the name.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear, but use fuller links between sentences to make the flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph and check small form errors in opening and closing.
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Task response: You cover the rubbish, the source, and what the council should do.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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