the diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity

the diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity
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The picture illustrates the production of
water
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electricity
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with assistance from the
hydro-electric
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hydroelectric
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generator. It can be seen that the process of making
electricity
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from
water
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consists of six processes, which are initiated from the
water
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cycle until its distribution to several facilities.
First,
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the heat from the sun makes sea
water
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evaporate and create clouds.
Then
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, the cold temperatures make the cloud condensate, until it precipitates into the
water
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droplets, which will be stored in the dam. Once the
water
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, the valve will be opened to send the
water
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into the turbine,
that
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produces two types of outcomes. The successfully converted
water
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will be delivered to the towers in the form of
electricity
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power meanwhile, the remaining
water
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will be pumped back to the reservoir via a pump machine. The
electricity
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power
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flows through the cables which end up in the transformer station and will be distributed to several facilities,
such
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as factories, schools, hospitals, and houses in the next process.
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