Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The world is participating in the race of
space
exploration to prove its scientific power and research to other nations. This
essay agrees that the government should spend money
on the well-being of its people
rather than space
exploration. Firstly
, money
should be spent on the research of drugs for vulnerable diseases
; secondly
, the infrastructure
of the country should be well developed.
First of all, millions of people
are dying around the globe because of untreatable diseases
. The government should spend money
to find the best possible solutions for these diseases
instead
of wasting money
on exploring space
that has no significant impact on human lives. Increasing the spending on research will increase the probability of getting a sustainable solution for those health illnesses. According to
a report by Bloomberg, 3 billion dollars can save more than 300000 people
in Africa who are struggling with HIV; NASA is spending that amount of money
every year for space
projects.
Secondly
, developing roads and bridges in every country will boost the economy of those countries. Infrastructure
plays a vital role in the development and well-being of countries. It makes it easy to do business and people
's lives more flexible and convenient. Better roads also
attract many tourists, bringing the tourist destinations closer. For instance
, Dubai was underdeveloped twenty years ago, but now it is leading the world in terms of tourism just because of its massive developed infrastructure
.
To conclude
, discovering the drugs for deadly diseases
should be a top priority; Infrastructure
should be followed next rather than burning hardly earned public taxes on space
exploration. In my opinion, the growth and development of the country should be given more attention instead
of showing power to other nations.Submitted by rushsoni1998 on
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Coherence & Cohesion
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