Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion?

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human activities on the

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which our planet is getting harmed day by day. But some think that it is better to have more experiments which makes the

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a better place to live. I personally believe that

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depletion. In

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of reasons which are affecting the

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and the most prominent one is

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. There are different types of

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affecting the

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the production of new cars

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individuals to buy new

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health problems.

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of resources. The

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level is getting lower

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its more wastage by

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human beings.

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the rivers which directly

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not only making it dirty but

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killing the

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the high demand

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the government is cutting more and more trees to make

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resulting in the extinction of

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the panda

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are on the verge of extinction

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deforestation.

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helps to research new things but the rise in the temperature

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of global warming

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as well. In conclusion,

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human activities

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to figure out something better, the change in climate

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global warming and

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of extinction is far

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than new research.

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Ensure a clear and consistent argument throughout the essay, with each paragraph focusing on a single main point that contributes to the overall stance.

coherence cohesion

Use transitional phrases to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs to improve the flow of the essay.

task achievement

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Address the prompt fully by discussing both views and providing a clear and decisive opinion.

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review the essay for sentence structure variety and proper use of complex sentences to enhance the quality of writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

337 words

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sustainability
renewable resources
carbon footprint
conservation
ecology
emissions
fossil fuels
greenhouse gases
habitat destruction
industrialization
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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