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There is more and more outrage and anger common in society today. Why is this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

#outrage #anger #society #development
It is certainly true that nowadays fashionableness of online teaching has grown notably.
While
 some people tend towards the viewpoint that nowadays, the popularity of online
education
 has grown significantly
that
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positive or negative, I would have to support the idea that both positive and negative. On the one hand , there are clear arguments that online
education
 is uncomfortable. One of the main reasons can be
that
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due to
 some objective reasons
such
 as power failure or loss of network
while
 studying online.
For example
,
while
 students are online learning
be
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 technical failures who are easily interrupted in online learning. Another significant reason can be that
while
 students are learning a lesson
who
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are might be distracted
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 other things.
This
.is because causes all kinds of problems.
On the other hand
 , I agree with the viewpoint that learning from home can be beneficial in some ways.
Firstly
, I believe that since online
education
 allows learners to attend classes from any location.
For instance
 , someone's home may be far away from the educational
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, and it will cost them time and money to get there .
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 I
also
 that online learning gives students the chance to choose a comfortable learning space to study.
This
 is because it is convenient for people and
also
 effective. In conclusion,
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while
 online
education
 has several advantages. I am in
favor
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 of the idea that its disadvantages are greater.
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task achievement
Ensure you fully understand the topic before writing. Misunderstanding the prompt can lead to writing off-topic, which affects the Task Achievement score. The current essay does not directly address the 'outrage and anger in society' prompt.
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Work on developing clear and focused main ideas that directly respond to the essay question. Make sure to present these ideas in a structured manner, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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Use relevant and specific examples to support your main points. This helps in clearly demonstrating your understanding of the topic and strengthens your argument.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay in a logical manner. This includes the usage of paragraphing, with one clear main idea per paragraph, and coherent transitions between paragraphs to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Make sure the introduction and conclusion serve their purposes effectively. The introduction should set the context and outline your position, while the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your stance.
coherence cohesion
Support main points with clear explanations, examples, or reasons. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea and the content should support that idea specifically.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Outrage culture
  • Amplification
  • Economic hardship
  • Sensationalist
  • Polarization
  • Constructive outcomes
  • Social frustration
  • Divisiveness
  • Societal norms
  • Historical context
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