The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The tables below tell the information about 1999 and 2004
sales
of Fairtrade-labeled coffee
and bananas
in five different countries
. There are 2 different categories which are coffee
and bananas
. This
Fairtrade was held in the 5 following countries
, which are; UK, Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden
.
From the tables, the overall
ratio of coffee
between the UK and the rest of the countries
has a significant gap. Similarly
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Similarly,
bananas
, the sales
made in 1999 and 2004 have a big steep rise between the other countries
. The overall
data was increasing between the two years, except for the number of bananas
sold in Sweden
and Denmarks
.
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Denmark
The fairtrade
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Fairtrade
labeled
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labelled
coffee
had the lowest sales
in Sweden
for
0.8 million Change preposition
at
euros
and the highest value in Switzerland
for
3 Change preposition
at
millions
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million
euros
. Meanwhile, in 2004, most sales
of coffee
was
in the UK at 20 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
millions
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million
euros
and the lowest sales
at 1 millions
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million
euros
in Sweden
.
For the banana fairtrade, the highest sales
made in 1999 was
in Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Switzerland
at 15 millions
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million
euros
and the lowest sales
was
at 0.6 Change the verb form
were
millions
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million
euros
in Belgium. Moreover
, the highest amount of bananas
sold was at 47 millions euro
in Fix the agreement mistake
million euros
Switzerland
and less sold at 0.9 million euros
in Denmark for the year 2004.Submitted by lydiaia on
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