the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates
average
change in the rate of copper, nickel and zink during the year 2014.
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the average
an average
Overall
, all three metal prices fluctuated during each month
of the year 2014. However
, during the initial 4-5 months
period price
fluctuated above the average of last
month
's percentage, and below during the next 4-5 months
, followed again by a rose in the last
2 months
.
in detail, nickel price
fluctuated highest in the Fix the agreement mistake
prices
month
of January achieving 6% above the average of last
month
. However
, that trend reduced drastically during the next 2 months
period to achieve only a 1% difference from the last
month
at the beginning of march
2014.Capitalize word
March
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Thereafter
month
of the
steady rate at 1% ,its Correct article usage
a
price
again dropped to achieve the lowest of all time, -3% in the month
of July, and by the mid of Octomber
, it wasn't recovered the 0% mark .
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October
On the other hand
, copper price
also
followed the same trend as the
nickel with fewer fluctuations.
Meanwhile, zinc elicited the least fluctuations of the three to maintain its Correct article usage
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price
above the 0% mark by
most of the Change preposition
for
months
in the year .Submitted by dinaka0001 on
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