the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014 

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates
average
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change in the rate of copper, nickel and zink during the year 2014.
Overall
, all three metal prices fluctuated during each
month
of the year 2014.
However
, during the initial 4-5
months
period
price
fluctuated above the average of
last
month
's percentage, and below during the next 4-5
months
, followed again by a rose in the
last
2
months
. in detail, nickel
price
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fluctuated highest in the
month
of January achieving 6% above the average of
last
month
.
However
, that trend reduced drastically during the next 2
months
period to achieve only a 1% difference from the
last
month
at the beginning of
march
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2014.
Thereaftre
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Thereafter
, with a
month
of
the
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steady rate at 1% ,its
price
again dropped to achieve the lowest of all time, -3% in the
month
of July, and by the mid of
Octomber
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October
, it wasn't recovered the 0% mark .
On the other hand
, copper
price
also
followed the same trend as
the
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nickel with fewer fluctuations. Meanwhile, zinc elicited the least fluctuations of the three to maintain its
price
above the 0% mark
by
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most of the
months
in the year .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 5 times.

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