the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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change in the rate of copper, nickel and zink during the year 2014.

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, all three metal prices fluctuated during each

month

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of the year 2014.

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, during the initial 4-5

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period

price

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fluctuated above the average of

last

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month

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's percentage, and below during the next 4-5

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, followed again by a rose in the

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. in detail, nickel

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price

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fluctuated highest in the

month

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of January achieving 6% above the average of

last

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month

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, that trend reduced drastically during the next 2

months

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period to achieve only a 1% difference from the

last

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month

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at the beginning of

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2014.

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steady rate at 1% ,its

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again dropped to achieve the lowest of all time, -3% in the

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of July, and by the mid of

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October

, it wasn't recovered the 0% mark .

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, copper

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also

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followed the same trend as

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nickel with fewer fluctuations. Meanwhile, zinc elicited the least fluctuations of the three to maintain its

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above the 0% mark

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most of the

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in the year .

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the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households. What problems are caused by household waste, and what solutions may be possible in both the short and the long term?

It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and families. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.