The pie charts below show the selected causes of death as a percentage of all deaths of registered Indians and the total population in 1992.

The pie charts below show the selected causes of death as a percentage of all deaths of registered Indians and the total population in 1992.
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to the mortality rate of Indians in 1922 by different categories. There are 19,548 population of the people. From an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that
accident
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occurance
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the often issue
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heart disease
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the least. The highest proportion of the figures were
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accounting
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44.19%. The second place lies on other
circumtances
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that have not been studied for 26.402% . Followed
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the rate of homicide and suicide, 13.91% and 8.109% respectively. Two other problems that happened to
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the same effects were cancer and heart disease. These health issues caused someone's deaths in the number of 5.23% and 2.058%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • mortality rates
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • neoplasms (cancers)
  • chronic diseases
  • infectious diseases
  • statistical significance
  • preventable causes
  • health disparities
  • lifestyle factors
  • epidemiological data
  • public health
  • socioeconomic factors
  • medical conditions
  • healthcare access
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