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Nowadays, many kids have become obese, and that causes a lot of health issues .This is why I strongly agree that physical classes must be mandatory in elementary and high schools, as this will lead to improving kids’ well-being and helps them have a better shape.

#kids #health #classes #schools #kids’ #shape
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 because sports need a good body Kids must have a good shape for their body because
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 the end im completely agree and I think families
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life after time.
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