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The charts below show the proportions of the wor/d's oíl resources he/din different areas, together with the proportions consumed annual/y in the same areas. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the wor/d's oíl resources he/din different areas, together with the proportions consumed annual/y in the same areas. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two charts compare the amount of
oil
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ressources
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resources
 in the world
in
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on
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 several surfaces
as well as
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 the annual consumption of
this
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 liquid.
Overall
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, the Asian continent has the highest percentage of the globe’s annual
oil
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 consumption even though it
posesses
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possesses
 few of the liquid’s
ressources
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resources
.
Furthermore
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,
it is clear that
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 the Middle East has the most important quantity of
this
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ressource
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resource
, but it does not consume much of it. Indeed, Asia is responsible for more than a quarter of the Earth’s
oil
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 consumption. In
this
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 continent, 26.21% of the liquid is used each year.
By contrast
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, in most
of
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the
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apply
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areas, no more than 7% of it is consumed annually, which means that Asia uses more than 3 times as much of the natural fluid as the other countries, even though it has less than 3% of the
ressource
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resource
.
On the other hand
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, the Middle East is home to more than half of the world’s
oil
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 quantities. More precisely, 56.52% of it is in that area.
However
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, it does not consume more than 7% of the fluid annually.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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