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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given diagram provides the different stages of production of cement
chunk
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chunks
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 for the industry of buildings.
Overall
, brick manufacture involves seven stages,
Correct pronoun usage
which emerges
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emerges
Correct subject-verb agreement
emerge
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 from digging,
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and passes
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passes
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 through a number of phases before going to the shops by delivery. As is given in the graph, the creation of blocks begins with digging the clay with a large digger. The clay is
then
 filtered and processed in a roller machine to escape from the metal grid and
then
 mixed with sand and water. After that point, the mixture is kept in a mould or in a wire cutter to create the raw shape of blocks. Afterwards, the shaped raw cement blocks dried in the oven for 24-48 hours, before putting them into the kiln. In
this
 stage, dried bricks are kept at moderate and high temperatures, between 200-1300 centigrade and
then
 placed in the cooling chamber for 48-72 hours. The next stage of constructing
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cinder block includes packaging and in the final
stage
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 cubes are delivered to building construction.
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structure
Ensure that you have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction and conclusion should encapsulate the main theme of the essay clearly.
cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing to manage the logical flow of information. Avoid repeating the same linking words.
task response
Focus on selecting the key features of the process and make them prominent in your summary. Avoid including too many minor details.
task response
Compare and contrast the stages as appropriate, using comparative language and structures to highlight differences and similarities.
coherence
Incorporate a wider range of vocabulary and structures to convey information more precisely and vary your language.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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