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Task one the two pie charts show the patron of expenditure in US between 1966-1996. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting and main feature and making comparisons where relevant

Task one the two pie charts show the patron of expenditure in US between 1966-1996. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting and main feature and making comparisons where relevant
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the given
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 pie charts indicate the percentages of expenses in
American
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America
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 from 1966 to 1996.
overall
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, food and cars constituted the most amount of costs in 1966 and 1996. moving onto detail, food which
was
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accounted for almost 50% in 1966, experienced a sharp decrease to one-seventh in 1996.
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, books fell to one-sixth in 1996, unlike restaurants which doubled
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this
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 year.
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, cars get nearly doubled in 1996 as well.
on the other hand
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, computers, and
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
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 didn't
experienced
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 a notable
chang
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 between 1966 and 1996 and their percentages were all under 11%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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