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Some think that quality art can be made by anyone while others think that it requires special talent and ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Sample Essay

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Some people believe that artistic creations need to be equipped with
talent
 and capacity, but others think to make
art
 there is no need to be gifted. Let us discuss both these statements to better understand. On the one hand, nowadays everyone can make good
art
 as
a
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modern technology allows it.
For instance
, with special sites or
apps
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 people can duplicate some masterpieces and even make much better by adding some details.
Secondly
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art
 has a tendency to get quality over time,
that
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 means unconventional and experimental work can be celebrated in the future.
For example
, if an unknown artist paints
the
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 picture, and after several decades he's
art
 becomes famous no one will care whether he
was
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 talented or not.
On the other hand
, it is true that
talent
 and capacity can inspire artists to achieve their targets. First of all any
talent
 without practice and hard work is mostly nothing.
Furthermore
,
by comparison
 with common people, in general, they will show more interest than others in artistic aspects and no longer get bored and lose interest.
For instance
, the one most known musician Mozart devoted himself to musical composition and many fulfilling works made by him, just
due to
 his intelligence,
talent
 and hard work. In
conclusion
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while
 anyone today can make quality
arts
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,
talent
 and ability
makes
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make
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 it much more interesting.
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Task Achievement
To enhance your Task Achievement, ensure your response fully addresses all parts of the task. Your essay should present a clear position throughout the response, elaborating on the contrasting viewpoints and providing relevant, specific examples. It's also essential to ensure coherence in your argument and to tie your conclusion directly back to the statements made within your body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, focus on the logical flow of your ideas. Use a range of linking devices to connect your sentences and paragraphs effectively, making it easier for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. Additionally, ensure each paragraph has a central idea that is expanded upon, rather than presenting incomplete thoughts.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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