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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.
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The given pie charts indicate the amount of the variety of vegetables which were imported from Qatari and
Oman
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 in 1990.
Overall
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, spinach and garlic were imported more than other vegetables in both countries in 1990. Moving onto detail, spinach which accounted for almost one-third of the whole imports in
Qatar
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, was approximately one-fourth in
Oman
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.
on the other hand
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,
Oman
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's peas import was nearly threefold of
Qatar
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's.
in addition
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, garlic which
was
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stood for 340 in
Qatar
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, constituted roughly 50 per cent of
Oman
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's imports.
it is clear that
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 amount of the imports not only for
Qatar
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 but
also
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 for
Oman
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 was the same.
moreover
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, broccoli was imported in the two countries with the eighty difference in number.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oman, qatar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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