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This
table provides information about alcohol-related deaths
in seven countries in 2005. Overall
, there is a clear correlation between the litres
of beer
consumed per capita and the number of alcohol-related deaths
.
It can be deduced from the table that the greatest beer
consumption
in 2002 was to be found in the Czech Republic, Germany and Austria and that each of these regions also
had by far the largest litres
of alcohol-related deaths
in 2005. The Czech Republic, with the greatest beer
consumption
per litre, namely over a hundred and thirty in 2002, also
experienced well over one million litres
alcohol-related deaths
by 2005. The region with the second highest beer
consumption
was Germany, with nearly 107 litres
, and it also
recorded the second highest number of alcohol-related deaths
, namely 1.185 million.
In all regions except Canada, it can be seen that the higher beer
consumption
, the higher the alcohol-related mortality rate. It is interesting that in Canada, with the lowest level of beer
consumption
, at 86 per capita, the mortality rate was the high as in Ireland, namely 0.58 million, although
in the latter the consumption
level was high. Other health or economic factors must be involved.
In conclusion, it is also
interesting to note that in each case the number of female deaths
was significantly lower than that of males, which seems to be a reflection of the fact that in general far fewer women than men drink.Submitted by kazza735 on
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