People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the main problems people in cities face, and how can these problems be tackled
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Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example