The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in last 3 years,between 3years to 5 years,not within the last 5 years

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in last 3 years,between 3years to 5 years,not within the last 5 years
The chart depicts the numbers of
people
who have moved
house
either in the
last
3
years
, between 3 to 5
years
, and not moved
house
in the
last
5
years
.
Overall
, most
people
from different ages in the given timeframe moved
house
3 to 5
years
ago, followed by
people
moving
house
in the
last
3
years
and not moving
house
in the
last
5
years
. Two groups of individuals aged 20-29 and aged 30-39 have a similar pattern with just only a number difference of someone moving
house
3 to 5
years
ago and moved
house
in the
last
3
years
. Both units stood at around 45 and 33.
Furthermore
, the
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numbers
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of
people
that did not move
house
reached 22.
Subsequently
, 55
of
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people
aged 40 to 49 moved
house
within 3 to 5
years
ago, with 31 individuals
moved
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house
in the
last
3
years
, and only 14
people
did not move
house
.
Lastly
, a group of
people
older than 50 had around 41
people
moving
house
within 3 to 5
years
or not moving
house
at all and 15
people
moving
house
in the
last
3
years
.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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