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Band 4.5

Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 foremost key to communication is
language
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. Nowadays, people argue that
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language
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 should be practised all over the globe to make less difficulties
while
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 making conversation.
This
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 view can be explained from different
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,some of
them
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 will be discussed briefly below. The first point to establish is that “Diversity” is what makes
human
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humans
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 specific. Our world
is held with
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 a vast
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population and numerous cultural practices. To elaborate
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this
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 , India is well-known for its diversity in culture,
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, Tamil Nadu is famous for its ancient
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 , some researchers
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 that ,
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 is the first and foremost accent introduced to
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 world,
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we can see a clear difference in their pronunciation from place-to-place, surprisingly , they all are noted one as a Tamilian. Difference in
language
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 is
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 honour for their ancestors in some of the religions.
On the other hand
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 , education plays a major role in
country’s
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a country’s
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 economic growth. To illustrate,
a
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well trained
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well-trained
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 professionals contribute their experience to the wellness of their nation,
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,top universities
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 around six or seven
accent
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 for their lectures.
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, graduates who wish to complete their
masters
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 degree program across the globe
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 some difficulties.
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 the top colleges for pursuing
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 profession ,but a student
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 the USA will counter a lot of
language
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problem
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problems
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.
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overall
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,
language
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 comes first
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 to socialize.
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with
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, from my point of view , accents should be balanced by
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the population
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 to tackle obstacles in their daily life.

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coherence cohesion
To improve the coherence and cohesion of your essay, ensure that your paragraphs are well-organized, with clear topic sentences followed by supporting details. Use a variety of transition words to smoothly connect ideas and paragraphs, reinforcing the logical flow of your essay.
task achievement
For task achievement, make sure to fully address the question prompt by discussing both sides of the argument if the task is to 'agree or disagree.' Include a clear thesis statement in your introduction, and end with a summary of your viewpoints in the conclusion. Provide specific examples and illustrations to support your claims throughout your essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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