The diagram indicates the life process of the honey bee

The diagram indicates the life process of the honey bee
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram indicates the life process of the honey bee
The diagram above illustrates the life
process
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of the honey
bee
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.
Overall
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, the life cycle takes between 34 to 36
days
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, from the hatching of the egg to becoming a mature
bee
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.
To begin
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with,
this
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process
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undergoes five stages and
begin
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begins
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with the female
bee
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.
Firstly
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,the female
bee
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will lay one or two eggs every three
days
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after mating with the male
bee
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. In the second stage, an egg will take approximately between 9 to 10
days
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to hatch.Next stage , a moulting
process
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is needed and the nymph can moult three times as it grows within 3
days
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. The nymph will be
feed
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fed
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by the worker
bee
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and grows during
development
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the development
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stage. As
the
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a
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result of the moulting
process
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, a young adult
bee
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emerges , and
begin
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begins
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the shedding
process
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.
This
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shedding
process
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will take up to four
days
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for a young adult
bee
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to become a mature
bee
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, bee, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollination
  • Ecosystems
  • Metamorphosis
  • Larva
  • Pupa
  • Nectar
  • Pollen
  • Foraging
  • Hive
  • Cell
  • Workers
  • Drones
  • Queen Bee
  • Mating Flight
  • Capped Cell
  • Colony
  • Reproduction
  • Brood
  • Apiary
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