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There is more and more outrage and anger common in society today. Why is this? Is this a positive and a negative development?

#outrage #anger #society #development
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owing to economic hardships and inequalities leading to social frustration.
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humans has very bad
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not
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health. Many
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 of the outrage on societal norms and personal relationships. Shortly saying, in my view, bad influencing to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Outrage culture
  • Amplification
  • Economic hardship
  • Sensationalist
  • Polarization
  • Constructive outcomes
  • Social frustration
  • Divisiveness
  • Societal norms
  • Historical context
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