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IT IS BETTER FOR CHILDREN TO BEGIN LEARNING A FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL RATHER THAN SECONDARY SCHOOL

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Foreign
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 have become a key component of school
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 in many parts of the world. But, whether
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 should learn them at primary or secondary school is a topic of frequent discussion. Some people argue that
children
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 should be introduced to international
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 at
primary
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 level. Personally, I believe that the pros of
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 outnumber the cons.
To begin
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bilingual or
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multilingual. Our foreign
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 abilities play a defining role in every field, be it finding a dream job in a multinational company or settling in a new country.
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, teaching international
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 to young pupils is a major step towards their bright future. More importantly,
children
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’s minds are highly receptive when they are young. They can learn anything much more quickly than adults and are not afraid of making mistakes. These early
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 lessons can not only boost the confidence level of learners but
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 help them attain native-like fluency. These classes will
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 have a positive impact on
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’s social life.
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, the negatives of making
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 learn an international
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 when they do not understand its value should not be overlooked. Most schools, especially the Asian ones, have many subjects like science, mathematics, history
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geography etc. in their curriculum.
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, young students have a lot to learn. So, including one more subject in the form of a foreign
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 definitely puts additional pressure on
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. Some learners find it hard to cope with
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 extra work. It is often observed that if students do not get the support they need, they tend to lose their interest in the
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,
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 acquisition is a gradual process. The sooner it begins, the better the results will be. I believe that careful lesson planning can make the entire learning experience enjoyable and rewarding for every child.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a clear main idea and that the supporting sentences directly relate to this main idea to improve the comprehensibility and impact of your arguments.

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