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the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.
#amounts #waste #three #companies #period #years
The line graph compares how
many
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waste
produced
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was produced
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 by three different companies in the period of 15 years.
It is clear that
 over the period of 15 years, the
waste
 produced by
company
C
 kept increasing,
while
company
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companies
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 A and
B
 had been reducing their produced
waste
. Looking at the information in more detail, in the
year
of
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2000,
company
 A
had
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produced the highest amount of
waste
 (12
tons
 in a
year
), followed
with
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company
B
 (
near
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 9
tons
 in a
year
).
In
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contrary
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the contrary
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,
company
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C
 produced the least
waste
 (around 3
tons
) that
year
.
On
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 2005,
company
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 A remained
as
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the highest producer of
waste
 (around 11
tons
 a
year
) even though there
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was
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 a visible effort to decrease the number.
On the other hand
,
company
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companies
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B
 and
C
had
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produced more
waste
amounted
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amounting
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 to 10
tons
 and 6
tons
 a
year
 respectively.
However
, during the
year
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years
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of
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2005 to 2015,
company
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companies
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 A and
B
 had been taking some actions to reduce their
waste
.
This
 resulted in visibly lower
waste
 in both
company
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companies
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 A and
B
, producing around 8
tons
 and 3
tons
 in a
year
 respectively. Yet, the figure in
company
C
 steadily increased from time to time, resulting in around 9
tons
 of
waste
 produced in the
year
of
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2015.
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