plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of air and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree ?

The illustrations present information about types of
crimes
and the relationship between
age
and crime in the UK for the
last
year. The
overall
trend shown in the data is that 80 tens of thousands
crime
Change preposition
of crime
show examples
accidents were committed by young people at the
age
of 20. The majority of humans
preferred
Wrong verb form
prefer
show examples
violent
crimes
. From the line
graph
Add a comma
graph,
show examples
it can be inferred that the number of adults in the
age
span from 44 to 60
commuted
Verb problem
committed
show examples
10 tens of
thousands
Fix the agreement mistake
thousand
show examples
crimes
last
year.
By contrast
, we observe a huge rise between the ages of 12 and 20,
coupled with
a decline in the
age
span from 21 to 28. It is noticeable that the smallest percentage of people
did
Verb problem
committed
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
public order
crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
show examples
in the UK
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
made
Wrong verb form
making
show examples
up only 9%.
In addition
, the sum of people
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
interested in violent
crimes
- 46%, property
crimes
- 23% and drug
crimes
- 22%.
Submitted by dulskywork on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Ensure that you directly address the question prompt and provide a clear position on whether or not you agree with the banning of plastic shopping bags to prevent pollution.
coherence cohesion
Introduce the topic effectively with a clear thesis statement and conclude your essay with a summary of your main points and a restatement of your position.
task achievement
Develop your main points with clear and relevant examples or explanations to support your argument. Use specific information related to the environmental impact of plastic bags and possible alternatives.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay with a clear and logical structure, with distinct paragraphs for introduction, main points, and conclusion. Transition smoothly between your ideas to maintain coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • ban
  • non-biodegradable
  • landfills
  • marine life
  • entanglement
  • ecosystem
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • single-use
  • reusable
  • biodegradable
  • consumer habits
  • recycle
  • pollution
  • alternative solutions
  • legislation
  • waste management
  • environmentally friendly
  • toxic
  • decompose
What to do next:
Look at other essays: