The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
The bar graph depicts how many Japanese travellers
going
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overseas by millions from 1985 to 1995.
Besides
, the line graph illustrates
the
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Australia's percentages of the Japanese tourist market. From an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that overseas travel showed
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popularity over these reporting periods,
whils
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while
, the rate of these travellers visiting Australia increased. In 1985, there are roughly 5
million
of the population in Japan went to international
destination
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. After half a decade,
this
number approximately doubled, till reached 11
million
in 1990.
However
, there was a marginal decline in
this
amount by almost one
million
in 1991. In the following years,
those share
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significantly rose and peaked at moderately below 16
million
at the end
of
period
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. Moving onto the second chart, the Australian territory only received 2% of the total in 1982. Interestingly,
this
number went up
slighly
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slightly
by 3%
afte
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after
four years,
then
it decreased in 1989. Since
then
, there
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an upward trend in Australia's share of Japan's tourist market, till finished at 6
million
in 1995.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist market
  • overseas travel
  • tourism industry
  • international campaigns
  • economic prosperity
  • travel preferences
  • market share
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trend
  • attracting
  • destination
  • variability
  • contributing factors
  • currency exchange rates
  • speculate
  • tourism policies
  • competitive markets
  • popularity
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