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You recently saw an advertisement in a newspaper seeking volunteers to do unpaid work with local children. You are interested in this work. Write a letter to the head of the organisation

#advertisement #newspaper #volunteers #work #children #head #organisation
Dear Mr Alex, I would like to apply for the position of volunteer which advertised
at
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 magazine that I read three days ago.
To begin
 with, I like
this
 job because
of
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I
want
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 spend time with children.
However
, there are some kids in
this
 town who need our help and I would like to handle
this
 issue. If you
would
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 tell me how to help and would be glad. For occurrence, I am a manager in the firm for 3 years.
Nevertheless
, I can help with the drinks,
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 fruits that grow in our garden. My colleagues and I going to go on Saturday
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that is
 February 10. Please inform me at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Khamro Shadiev.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains one clear idea or point that is developed and explained. Combine related sentences to strengthen coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a logical structure that includes an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion to guide the reader smoothly through the letter.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task in the letter, including showing your interest, explaining why you want to volunteer, and offering specifics about how you can contribute.
Task Achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone appropriate for a letter to the head of an organization, and use formal closing salutations.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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