You recently saw an advertisement in a newspaper seeking volunteers to do unpaid work with local children. You are interested in this work. Write a letter to the head of the organisation

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Dear Mr Alex, I would like to apply for the position of volunteer which advertised

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magazine that I read three days ago.

To begin

with, I like

this

job because

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want

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want to

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spend time with children.

However

, there are some kids in

this

town who need our help and I would like to handle

this

issue. If you

would

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could

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tell me how to help and would be glad. For occurrence, I am a manager in the firm for 3 years.

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, I can help with the drinks,

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and the

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fruits that grow in our garden. My colleagues and I going to go on Saturday

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that is

February 10. Please inform me at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Khamro Shadiev.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure each paragraph contains one clear idea or point that is developed and explained. Combine related sentences to strengthen coherence.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use a logical structure that includes an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion to guide the reader smoothly through the letter.

Task Achievement

Address all parts of the task in the letter, including showing your interest, explaining why you want to volunteer, and offering specifics about how you can contribute.

Task Achievement

Maintain a polite and formal tone appropriate for a letter to the head of an organization, and use formal closing salutations.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

120 words

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You recently saw an advertisement in a newspaper seeking volunteers to do unpaid work with local children. You are interested in this work. Write a letter to the head of the organisation

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