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The chart below shows the expenditure of the two countries on goods

The chart below shows the expenditure of the two countries on goods
The bar chart depicts the data about the amount of
money
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 which was spent on consumer goods in the
UK
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 and
France
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that both countries spent most of the
money
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 on cars
while
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 spending the least on perfume.
Moreover
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, the chart illustrates a dramatic difference between the two countries in the expenditure on cameras. In terms of cars, the
UK
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 spent approximately 450.000
pounds
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 on
this
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, as opposed to
France
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 which spent 400.000
pounds
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.
Similarly
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, British expenditure on books was higher than the French (nearly 300.000 and 400.000
pounds
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 respectively).
Furthermore
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, the amount of
money
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 that the
UK
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 spent was over double the
money
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 spent in
France
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.
However
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,
pounds
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 spent on remaining goods were higher in
France
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. French expenditure on computers was slightly more than the British who spent nearly 350.000
pounds
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. Neither of the countries wanted to spend many
pounds
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 on perfume, but
France
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 still spent more than the
UK
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, at 200.000

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, uk, france, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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