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The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.
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The line chart illustrates the comparisons of the Gross Domestic
Product
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 (GDP) in
Bangladesh
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,
Pakitastan
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Pakistan
, Nepal, and
Malaysia
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 in
billions
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 of US
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dollar
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dollars
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. It is noticeable that
Gross
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the Gross
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 Domestic
Product
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 of all countries
increasing
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increased
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 in a half decade from 2010 to 2015.
Furthermore
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, the highest
increased
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which
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is
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Bangladesh
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in Bangladesh
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 and Pakistan. In 2010, we can see that the Gross Domestic
Product
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 for several countries had
different
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a different
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number
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numbers
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 which
were
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 the proportion of
the
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Malaysia
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, Pakistan,
Bangladesh
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, and
Nepas
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Nepal
 was approximately 250, 180, 120, and 30 in
billions
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 of U.S.
dollars
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, respectively.
Moreover
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, the gap between Nepal and
Bangladesh
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 was 100
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billions
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billion
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dollars
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 in 2010 but the Gross Domestic
Product
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 of
Bangladesh
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was
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dramaticaly
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dramatically
 increased from 2012 to 2015 and the Gross Domestic
Product
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 of Nepal
was
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slightly increased.
Consequently
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, the gap between
Bangladesh
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 and Nepal
increase
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increased
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 until reached
from
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120 billion
dollars
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 to 150 billion
dollars
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.
On the other hand
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, the Gross Domestic
Product
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 of
Pakistal
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Pakistan
 rose increased during
period
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the period
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 2010 to 2015
which
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when
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 the amount of Gross Domestic
Product
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 was 180
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billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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U.S.
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dollar
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dollars
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 to more than 200
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billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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U.S.
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dollar
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dollars
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.
In addition
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, the range of Gross Domestic
Product
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 (GDP) between Pakistan and
Malaysia
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 was fall because the Gross Domestic
Product
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 of
Malaysia
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 had sharply decreased from 350 to 290
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billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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U.S.
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dollar
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dollars
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words product, bangladesh, malaysia, billions, dollar, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
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