Nowadays, anyone can post information on the internet even if it is incorrect. As a result, most of the information we read is accurate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The amount of online
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has been significantly increasing in recent years,
due to
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the fact that anyone can add
data
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online without any confirmation. It can be easily stated that
this
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uncontrolled process may result in a lot of inaccurate
data
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on the net. One of the
reason
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why much
data
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online is not true is the loading process. Since almost every individual irrespective of their educational
backgrounds
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is allowed to load
information
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online, the knowledge that they loaded may not reflect the reality
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due to
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their lack of
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.
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, today a
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may create a blog about cars and he can write about cars,
engines
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and engines
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for hundreds of pages, and he is able to post these pages even if they
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not accurate.
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, a kid who wants to search about
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a vehicle
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may read these pages, and can easily accept that
data
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as correct
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. In
this
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way
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inaccurate
data
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tends to spread fastly across the world. In comparison with
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approach of printing a book, which requires several verifications from types of different experts, including an editor and a linguist, writing a blog
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does
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not require any confirmations, and
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, some inaccurate
data
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may spread.
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, some companies may share inaccurate
information
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in order to raise their profit. To clarify, there are several organizations, like drug companies tend to
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individuals with some wrong
data
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to increase their income.
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, there are numerous articles online, which highlight the importance of using vitamins or other supplements and
also
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many of them are funded by drug companies. Many of them are accepted as a valuable source of
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,
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many of them are rejected by scientists. But as long as these articles
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online, men and women will be distracted by inaccurate
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. Unfortunately, these skewed articles may result in adverse consequences and even fatalities. There are more than a hundred cases in the USA, which inform about people, who suffer from liver troubles in
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the wake
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of using supplements.
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, when all these factors are taken into account,
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a large amount of wrong
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has been
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online.
This
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procees
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process
is driven by either
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of
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of a young adult or
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desire of a company
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to make
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more profit. In order to protect people from
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inaccurate
and
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skewed
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,
loading
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the loading
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data
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process should be monitored by experts.

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