You have a friend who has always liked the car you currently drive. Now you have decided to sell the car. You think your friend might be interested in buying it. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, say why you want to sell your car describe the condition of the car invite the friend to come and see the car himself/herself someday Write at least 150 words.

Dear Tom, I hope you are doing well. As you know, I've Honda Civic
car
from
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last
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3 years, and you really enjoy driving that
car
. I'm trying to sell
this
car
and was wondering if you are willing to buy it. You know I was trying to get admission at Columbia College in Canada and luckily my dream
come
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true.
Last
week, I got a confirmation email from that College.
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, I need to move by
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of March 2024. So, I was planning to sell my
Car
before I
leave
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and I know you always wanted to have
this
car
. Recently, I changed the
car
oil and all services are done too. The
car
is
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only
drove
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for 20k km,
moreover
,
few
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months back
i
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changed the tires and
furthermore
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and
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there are no scratches or dents. So,
overall
the
car
is in pretty good condition. It would be great if you come and see the
car
someday. Currently, I'm out of town
due to
some
paper work
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but, I'll be back by 15 February. Why
not
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you come anytime after
15th
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the 15th
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? See you soon. Regards, John
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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas across sentences and paragraphs more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Create a more logical structure by clearly organizing your ideas into an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
Task achievement is high as all components of the prompt are addressed. However, each point can be further expanded with more details.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable and friendly, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend. It could be enhanced by showing more enthusiasm or personal touch.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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