Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers, should be required to wok in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Disccuss both of these views and give your opinion

While
some individuals think that certain types of professionals should stay and
work
in the places where they became educated, others believe that there is no necessity for
this
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should have a kind of freedom in
chosing
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choosing
the place of their future
work
. In my way of thinking, both opinions could be true under certain circumstances. In
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essay, I am going to explain my point of view and bring a number of examples to illustrate. On the one hand, the most crucial negative prospect I would like to point out is the so-called brain drain. Needless to say, if all
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, educated in their native
country
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luck in other places, the initial
country
would suffer a huge loss in experts and funds it has spent for the
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maintaining
studying processes.
Hence
, I wholeheartedly believe, the students should stay and
work
in the
country
that gave them their education. Another not less essential prospect
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is the way a student became educated.
For example
, in my
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there is a strategy
according to
which a number of provinces may be interested
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of proficients. For
this
purpose, the province announces about kind of needed experts and the required number of them, and even
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amounts for these. Obviously, in
such
situations, it is mandatory for the students to
work
in the province.
On the other hand
, every person should have the freedom to choose the place where he wants to
work
and apply the acquired knowledge.
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, if the student graduated
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university and became a specialist in marine science, but the
country
has no sea, the only way for him to find an appropriate
work
is to find it in the
country
that has a sea. I do not see any reason to forbid
this
behaviour. In conclusion, mostly I agree with the statement that educated in some
country
persons should have an intention to
work
in
this
place.
On the contrary
, under some circumstances, it is better to leave for
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in
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. At least, it
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should not be forbidden.
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Ensure that both views and your own opinion are discussed fully and developed with reasons and examples to support them.
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