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Scientific research should only be carried out by govt and not be private companies. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a widely held view that personal companies are not allowed to conduct scientific
research
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 unless they are part of the
goverments
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governments
government
. I totally disagree with
this
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 statement and the reasons behind my thought will be discussed in the essay.
Firstly
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, the governance cannot ensure that
research
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 programs
runs
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 perfectly
due to
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 limited
of
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funds.
State
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 authorities have to make allotments in various aspects of the country,
such
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 as
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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, public transportation, or health and educational subsidies.
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, they have limitations in allocating budgets to carry out scholastic
research
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. In
such
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 a case, if private institutions are permitted to initiate their own studies, the nations would generate more publications than
research
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 merely conducted by
state
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 institutions.
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, private
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 universities are privately funded, which means that they rely on tuition, endowment, and donations; eventually, they can perform many object studies without depending on limited budgets from governments.
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 why knowledge-based
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 should be done from various statuses.
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, science-based studies is a personal curiosity so every person has
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rights
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right
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 to do it without being bound by the
state
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. When researchers have limitations
to
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in
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 leading the experiments
by
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to
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 a country's policies, the results will not be optimal.
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, researchers move to other countries since there will be more promising and the country left will lose its credibility.
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, my professor wants to conduct an experiment about sustainable energy, but he should allow complex administrations from authorities, so he is losing motivation to continue his
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. And now, he has moved to another nation, and until today, he has published 50% more journals than before. In conclusion, analytical
research
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 can
carried
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be carried
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 out either by private companies or governments because it is
experts'
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the experts'
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 freedom to do so,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 the
state
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 authorities
imposible
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impossible
 can spend
a whole expenditures
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whole expenditures
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 just for
research
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-based programs.

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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
In terms of task achievement, aim to present a more balanced argument with clear positions throughout the essay. While you disagreed with the statement, it is crucial to acknowledge the other side of the argument too. Make sure that the conclusion summarises your main points adequately and reflects your opinion consistently. Additionally, include more relevant and specific examples to support your arguments and illustrate your ideas more concretely.
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