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Some people believe that in a city, the best way to travel is by car, while other people argue that bicycles are a better way of travelling in a city.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays, there is a
moden
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modern
 area, few
people
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 believe that
cars
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 are very
helped
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helpful
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 to going to
out
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apply
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said area.It is
a
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apply
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safer
to
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for
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 children and parents. Other
human
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humans
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 believe that
Body paragraph 1
bicycle
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are
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is
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bater
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better
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then
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than
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car
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cars
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 because it is help
to
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apply
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people
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physical
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with physical
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 Fitness. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will discuss both said and give my opinion in
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last
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the last
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 paragraph.
Body paragraph 2
On the one
said
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side
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 of
coin
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the coin
a coin
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, There are very positive
point
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points
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 for
cars
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,
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a moter
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moter
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motor
car
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 is very
usefull
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useful
 for some
season
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seasons
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 like rain,
hotdays
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hot days
 and cold days.
People
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 go to
other city
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another city
other cities
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Body paragraph 3
for their
cars
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. Because it is very
confortable
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comfortable
 for their
car
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 for going
chaild
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child
.
other
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Another
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 thing,
people
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useing
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using
 their
car
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for going
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to go
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office
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to office
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 and beaches and
city
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the city
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. For the
Body paragraph 4
Reason
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The reason
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, In today's fast track and
lince
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line
. There are many Roads
Jam
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jammed
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in
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with
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 traffic and noise their help to traffic and sound like closing the
car
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windoe
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window
 and sitting in their
Body paragraph 5
car
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.
As a result
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, There are many
people
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travel
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travelling
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bt
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by
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 train and bus. and they helped their
crowded
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crowd
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.
Om
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On
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 the other
said
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side
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 of
coin
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the coin
a coin
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, few
society
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societies
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 and
family
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families
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 believe that cycles are useful for their children and
youngsytar
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youngsters
youngster
.Because they help their good
helth
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health
 and physical
Body paragraph 6
fitness, There are many
road
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roads
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are
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that are
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devlop
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develop
developed
 to raid
the
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apply
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bicycle
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 on their Road and
also
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 there are many events
keep
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that keep
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 our
goverment
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government
 for every
years
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year
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. They have only one message
Body paragraph 7
"Fit India"
for
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apply
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explain
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explains
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, There are many medal class family use their bike to
going
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go
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 to other
city
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cities
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 or ride for their
frineds
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friends
.
Hence
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, Cycles are helped human energy and
Body paragraph 8
fitnes
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fitness
.
Conclusion
For
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In
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 conclusion, In
this
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essay
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essay,
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their
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there
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 are
few
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a few
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 positive
point
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points
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in
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about
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cars
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 and
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bicycle
Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
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. But my opinion is
bicycle
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 is good for children and our generation.

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Introduction
Work on creating a clear and concise introduction that presents the topic and your thesis statement. Avoid vagueness and get straight to the point.
Coherence
Develop logical paragraphs with clear topic sentences that introduce the main idea, followed by supporting details and examples.
Cohesion
Ensure that ideas and paragraphs are well-linked with appropriate cohesive devices such as conjunctions, linking words, and pronouns.
Task Response
Focus on addressing all parts of the task. Ensure you discuss both views thoroughly and provide a clear personal opinion on the matter.
Language and Grammar
Make sure to use a range of sentence structures and vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively and to demonstrate language proficiency.
Tone
Refrain from using informal language and focus on maintaining a formal tone throughout the essay.
Accuracy
Work on the accuracy of language, including grammar, punctuation, and spelling to improve the overall quality of the essay.
Conclusion
End the essay with a conclusion that summarises the main points and restates your opinion. Make it distinct from the introduction and body paragraphs.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • maintenance
  • eco-friendly
  • infrastructure
  • physical health
  • suitable
  • weather conditions
  • traffic
  • repair costs
  • cycling infrastructure
  • fuel costs
  • carrying heavy loads
  • physical limitations
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