Some people believe that in a city, the best way to travel is by car, while other people argue that bicycles are a better way of travelling in a city.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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moden
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modern
area, few
people
believe that
cars
are very
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to going to
out
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said area.It is
a
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safer
to
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for
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children and parents. Other
human
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humans
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believe that
bicycle
are
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is
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bater
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better
then
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than
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car
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cars
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because it is help
to
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apply
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people
physical
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with physical
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Fitness. In
this
essay
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I will discuss both said and give my opinion in
last
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the last
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paragraph. On the one
said
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side
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of
coin
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the coin
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, There are very positive
point
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points
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for
cars
,
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a moter
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moter
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motor
car
is very
usefull
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useful
for some
season
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seasons
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like rain,
hotdays
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hot days
and cold days.
People
go to
other city
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another city
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for their
cars
. Because it is very
confortable
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comfortable
for their
car
for going
chaild
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child
.
other
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thing,
people
useing
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using
their
car
for going
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to go
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office
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to office
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and beaches and
city
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the city
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. For the
Reason
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, In today's fast track and
lince
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line
. There are many Roads
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in
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with
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traffic and noise their help to traffic and sound like closing the
car
windoe
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window
and sitting in their
car
.
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, There are many
people
travel
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travelling
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bt
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by
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train and bus. and they helped their
crowded
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.
Om
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On
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the other
said
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side
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of
coin
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the coin
a coin
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, few
society
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societies
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and
family
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families
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believe that cycles are useful for their children and
youngsytar
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youngsters
youngster
.Because they help their good
helth
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health
and physical fitness, There are many
road
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roads
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are
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that are
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devlop
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develop
developed
to raid
the
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apply
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bicycle
on their Road and
also
there are many events
keep
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that keep
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our
goverment
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government
for every
years
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year
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. They have only one message "Fit India"
for
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apply
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explain
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explains
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, There are many medal class family use their bike to
going
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go
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to other
city
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cities
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or ride for their
frineds
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friends
.
Hence
, Cycles are helped human energy and
fitnes
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fitness
.
For
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In
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conclusion, In
this
essay
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essay,
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their
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there
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are
few
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a few
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positive
point
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points
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in
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about
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cars
and
bicycle
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bicycles
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. But my opinion is
bicycle
is good for children and our generation.
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