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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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One
 cannot deny the fact that
autopilots
 and
driverless
vehicles
 are
one
 of the most controversial debates nowadays. Some feel that there are
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 of drawbacks;
however
,
i
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 am of the opinion that
pros
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 outweigh the cons. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs
as well as
 proffer justification for my own viewpoint. Regarding those who see more disadvantages, there are many reasons.
One
 supportive claim is that it is hard to rely on
driverless
vehicles
 because controlling those automobiles
are
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 pretty much impossible, which can lead to unexpected loss of control and
fails
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. More specifically, if
driverless
vehicles
 will not be developed to the level where people can be comfortable enough to use them, they can lead to severe levels of accidents, injuries, and death.
In addition
, some autopilot engines are
temperature sensitive
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 and can fail in some specific conditions.
For instance
, there have been a lot of accidents because of the
autopilots
 with engines APC and APA.
Nevertheless
, I firmly believe that the advantages of having
driverless
vehicles
 overshadow the disadvantages.
One
 compelling advantage is that
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 AI and
autopilots
 are considered to be much safer.
For example
, the car company called Tesla has
autopilots
 that function perfectly;
thus
, the number of car accidents is low. Not only are they relatively safer, but
also
driverless
vehicles
 are much more effective and have reduced fatigue. What is more, using those
vehicles
 can have financial benefits like not requiring to hire drivers. In sum,
i
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 maintain that having
driverless
vehicles
 might benefit us in many ways. In the future, I sincerely wish that these technologies will be more advanced, so everyone can rely on
autopilots
.
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coherence cohesion
The essay provides a mostly coherent response to the prompt with an evident structure. However, the introduction and conclusion could be stronger and more clearly delineated.
coherence cohesion
Main points are supported by some reasoning and examples, yet there could be more detail and depth to the examples provided, thus enhancing their persuasiveness.
task achievement
The essay addresses the question and presents a clear position throughout the response, but it's advisable to explore the nuances of the argument more thoroughly and provide a more balanced discussion before reaching a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Beware of grammatical mistakes (e.g., 'One cannot deny the fact that...' could be rephrased as 'It is undeniable that...') and capitalization issues ('i' should always be capitalized as 'I'). These errors can detract from the overall clarity and professionalism of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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