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The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012.
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THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES HOW THE
TEMPERATURES
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 CHANGE BY THE MONTH IN TWO AUSTRALIAN
CITIES
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. THE BAR CHART DEMONSTRATES THE AVERAGE NUMBER OF
DAYS
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 WITH
RAINFALL
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 IN TWO AUSTRALIAN
CITIES
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 IN A YEAR.
OVERALL
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, IN THE MIDDLE MONTHS OF THE YEAR,
TEMPERATURES
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 ARE LOWER THAN EARLIER AND
LAST
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 MONTHS OF THE YEAR IN
BOTH
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CITIES
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.
IN ADDITION
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, THE NUMBER OF
DAYS
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 WITH
RAINFALL
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 IS THE HIGHEST IN
BRISBANE
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 EXCEPT FROM JUNE TO SEPTEMBER WHEN
CANBERRA
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 ACCOUNTED FOR MORE
RAINFALL
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DAYS
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. AVERAGE DAILY
TEMPERATURES
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IS
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ARE
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 EXPERIENCED IN FEBRUARY WHEN
BOTH
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 MINIMUM AND MAXIMUM ARE TOPMOST IN
BOTH
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CITIES
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.
CANBERRA
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 COMPRISES FOR AT LEAST 14
DAYS
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 AND MAXIMUM OF 27
DAYS
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,
WHILE
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BRISBANE
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 ACCOUNTS BETWEEN 20-30
DAYS
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ACCORDING TO
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 THE MINIMUM AND MAXIMUM DAILY
TEMPERATURES
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.
FURTHERMORE
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,
BOTH
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 BRISBAND AND
CANBERRA
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 EXHIBIT DROPS UNTIL AUGUST AND IN AUGUST, THE MAXIMUM AND MINIMUM TEMPERATURE OF BRISBAND DECLINE FROM 30 TO 23 AND 21 TO 10 DEGREES;
HOWEVER
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, THE MINIMUM TEMPERATURE OF
BRISBANE
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 IS EXTREMELY CLOSE TO 0,
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NONETHELESS
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AND NONETHELESS
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 MAXIMUM CAN BE AROUND 10 DEGREE. REGARDING THE BAR GRAPH, IN MOST OF THE MONTHS,
BRISBANE
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 INDICATES MORE
DAYS
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 WITH
RAINFALL
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 COMPARED TO
CANBERRA
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. IN FEBRUARY AND MARCH,
BRISBANE
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 SHOWS AN UPWARD TREND AND REACHES A PEAK WITHIN 14
DAYS
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.
BY CONTRAST
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, FROM JUNE TO SEPTEMBER,
CANBERRA
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 ACCOUNTED FOR THE SUPREME WITH 10
DAYS
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 OF THE MONTH.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, cities, days, rainfall, both, brisbane, canberra with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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