Some people are very strict about their school uniforms and the apprearance of their pupils, while other schools have a relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

In
this
modern era, most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
universities are prepared
Change preposition
with comfrtable
show examples
comfrtable
Correct your spelling
comfortable
dress
code
Fix the agreement mistake
codes
show examples
so ,
students
can
relaxed
Change the verb form
be relaxed
relax
show examples
. Some
school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
show examples
are focusing on
students
Change noun form
students'
student's
show examples
attire and being strict. They have their pro and cons. In
this
essay,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
will explain
merits
Correct article usage
the merits
show examples
and
dmerits
Correct your spelling
demerits
of having
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a school uniform
school uniforms
show examples
school
uniforms.
To begin
,
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
show examples
of educational
campus
Fix the agreement mistake
campuses
show examples
prefer their children to be in
deciplinend
Correct your spelling
disciplined
and focus on their
appearence
Correct your spelling
appearance
,
becouse
Correct your spelling
because
these practice
Change the determiner
this practice
these practices
show examples
will help them to improve
confidence
Correct pronoun usage
their confidence
show examples
and provide information about the
hygine
Correct your spelling
hygiene
.
Moreover
, having said that
school
is the place
wear
Correct your spelling
where
show examples
pupil should learn the
deciplined
Correct your spelling
disciplined
discipline
and their
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
.
For instance
, in India number of
school
Change to a plural noun
schools
show examples
are
extremly
Correct your spelling
extremely
strict about their uniform, and parents have
xto
Correct your spelling
to
follow
otherwise
they have to pay
penalty
Correct article usage
a penalty
show examples
.
On the other hand
,
their
Correct your spelling
there
show examples
a some drawbacks, and educational
center
Fix the agreement mistake
centers
show examples
should consider that .
Firstly
, when toddler are not
using
Verb problem
wearing
show examples
relaxed
uniform
Fix the agreement mistake
uniforms
show examples
they can not
foucued
Correct your spelling
focus
focused
on their studies and they can
experienced
Change the verb form
experience
show examples
stress.
Specially
Replace the word
Especially
show examples
the
primeary
Correct your spelling
primary
students
,
For example
, international schools
are following
Wrong verb form
follow
show examples
strict dress
code
Fix the agreement mistake
codes
show examples
for
kinder garden
Correct your spelling
kindergarten
show examples
students
as well as
kids
does
Correct subject-verb agreement
do
show examples
not like it.
Furthermore
, kinder garden
students
are not required to have a uniform,
Its
Correct your spelling
It's
show examples
extra
Correct article usage
an extra
show examples
cost for the parents as they are playing most of the time spoiling the
unfiroms
Correct your spelling
uniforms
. To
conculde
Correct your spelling
conclude
, the kids will be
deciplined
Correct your spelling
disciplined
and learn how to dress up,
however
,
its
Correct your spelling
it's
show examples
extra cost
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
and pupils can not feel comfortable.
Submitted by pr6272189 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Ensure you fully answer the prompt including clear advantages and disadvantages and that your position is clear throughout the essay.
task response
Consider using complex sentences and higher-level vocabulary to provide more clarity and depth to your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more logically and using paragraphing effectively to aid understanding.
coherence cohesion
Include an introductory sentence at the beginning of each paragraph to give the reader a clear idea of the paragraph's main topic.
coherence cohesion
Check for minor grammatical errors and typos to enhance the overall clarity and professionalism of your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: