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The diagram shows the improvement that happened in liverton dock since 1980 until today. Over all, the building is completely changed and expanded in their facilities in the recent time.

The diagram shows the improvement that happened in liverton dock since 1980 until today. Over all, the building is completely changed and expanded in their facilities in the recent time.
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The diagram shows the improvement that happened in
liverton dock
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Liverton Dock
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since
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from
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 1980 until today.
Over all
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, the building
is
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has
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 completely changed and expanded
in
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their
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its
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 facilities in
the
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apply
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recent
time
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times
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. in 1980, the
place
 was used
as
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for parking boats surrounded by two warehouses
at
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on
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 the north side and one storehouse located
at
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on
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 the south side.
Additionally
, there were two Granes to carry away the boats when needed. The
place
located
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is located
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 directly over the coast. Nowadays, the
place
 has been modernised and has been used for recreational and accommodation purposes. The two warehouses located at the north bank
replaced
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were replaced
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 by educational
facility
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facilities
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 and entertainment
place
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places
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 for kids.
Moreover
, the Grane
converted
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was converted
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to
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into
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 a
place
 for a sailing club.
While
 the southern bank had been converted to accommodational purposes,
such
 as
hotel
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hotels
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 and apartments, attached to them a big parking area.
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addition
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addition,
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 the pier for boats
are
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does
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 not
existed
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exist
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 anymore and has been used as
ship
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a ship
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 museum.
Finally
, there is no access to the coast, as a bridge had been built and
flood
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a flood
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 barrier had been built at the coast.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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