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Questions • Apologize for damaging the product • Explain what happened • Say how are you going to fix the issue.

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Dear Asila
Hello
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Hello,
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 my friend. I borrowed a potato
product
 from you
last
 week, and it was damaged. I didn't mean to hurt. I wanted to plant it in my garden. But it didn't seem like it. I'm sorry my friend. I did not take good care of the
product
 I received from you. The
color
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colour
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 of the potato
product
 was good at the beginning.
Then
 it started to change slowly. I don't know why. The next day, when I paid attention, I felt a change. I wanted to fix it,
I
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so I
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filled it with water, washed it and opened it inside.
However
, the inside of the potato is eaten by worms. Not knowing what to do. I cleaned the inside of the
product
 and buried it on the ground. We will solve the problem easily. We take care of the
product
 every day, spray it with medicine and water it every day.
Then
 we will get rid of the problem quickly. Yours sincerely Mokhinur
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Make sure to fully cover all parts of the task given in the question. Provide a detailed apology, a clear explanation of the circumstances, and a comprehensive and realistic action plan for resolving the issue. Include necessary details to make your explanation and plan persuasive and specific.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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