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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given column chart illustrates the proportion of Iceland's inhabitants aged in three decades. Notably, groups of 25-54
years
 dominated the
population
 and steadily increased spanning from 1990 to 2020. The other groups, except
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-14
years
, witnessed
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 fluctuating trends.
To begin
 with, in the initial period of reports, over 30% of
population
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the population
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 were 25-54
years
 of age, peaking in 2020 by almost 50%. The youngest group proportions gradually decreased, thereby, widening their gap with the populations of people who have aged between 25 and 54
years
. The gap peaked in 2020 by more than 35%.
In addition
, the group of 15-
24
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24-year-olds
years
 old saw a decline in
population
 proportion in the three decades. Its percentages fell from around 20% to less than 10%.
Furthermore
,
elder
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 people proportions never exceed 20% of
population
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the population
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. In the beginning, the percentage of the eldest category was slightly under the younger one. But its percentage gradually decreased and surpassed the younger until the
last
 period.
Thus
, the group with people aged 55 to 64 had the lowest proportions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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